Ah well having the eyesight fixed is a nice hidden bonus to the transformation, and Yael needs all of these "small mercies" that she can get given how much she is going to get put through the TF wringer.
Firstly, let me say this is very cute and I can't wait to see it in game. (Along with the different reactions the characters have to their situation)
Tiny piece of hopefully constructive criticism third from the end looks fractionally too tall. She is bent over slightly and yet her height is the same as the next frame where she is standing up straight... Dragging her down slightly or a very minor shrink is probably all it needs.